Esl 21B, 1383
Essay 1.2
7/5/2007
What's difference between Chinese and Americans.
We know that there are different music style between area and area, country and country, city and city. It is easy to separate. How about culture, theCut equality, informality and time conceptSing/Plu between countries? It is difficult to identify them. {***}Conj/TransEach country has it's own culture and values. {***}ChoppyThere are some difference between American culture and Chinese culture, such as EqualityCapitalization, informality and time valueAwkward. Some of themReference not clear seem wrong and undesirable in my eyes.
First of all, Americans believe that 'all men are created equal' and they are equal valueAwkward and no one is born superior thanWChoice other. ItWChoice is a good phenomenon. On the other hand, Chinese has a different concept of EqualityCapitalization between American. They think all people are born equal, but the truth is not like that. I was living in China when I was young and I found that money is everything in China. People were separated into two groups, rich and poor. It was wrong and undesirable. For example, Once my mumWChoice and I went to a restaurant for dinner, and there were many customers, therefore, we need to wait for some time. After a while, ItCapitalization was our turn to have dinner. Suddenly there were some government officials cameAwkward and they was usingVTense their forceWChoice to get a table. In China, people are afraid of officials because they have money and position. It was unfair and wrong. It is different in American, everybody wasVTense the same, it wasVTense fair and I love it.{1}
Second, the informalityAwkward is different between American and Chinese. Because of their notion of equality, AmericanSing/Plu became quite informal in their general behavior and in their relationships with other people. From their dressing, we can sawVTense it. In AmericanWForm, people wear casuallyAwkward in a general condition. On the other hand, in Hong Kong, a city of China, people like to dressingVForm up to show off their superiorWForm. The teenagers usually buy a lot of clothes with famous brand name which is expensive. Then they can show that they have money. This is not a good phenomenon because it wasted a lot of money in dressing.
At lastWChoice, the concept of time between American and Chinese similar but different, both of them thinksS/VAgreement 'Time is money' and they would not want to waste it, However, Chinese use time more effectively. The adultVague would do a lot of work with the same period of time in American; the student need go to school with a long time everyday. In Hong Kong, they think punctual is important, both students and adult. You can't {***}MissingWlate for school or work, if isn't, you will be punished.
There are many differences between my own country and the United States. The have different concept in time, informality and Equality, some of them make me feel it is wrong and undesirable and people need to know the differences and to avoid the international conflicts and misunderstandings.
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| 1 | Subject/verb agreement error |
| 3 | Capitalization error |
| 1 | Conjunction/Transition error |
| 1 | Cut -- this text is not necessary |
| 1 | Missing word or words |
| 2 | Singular/plural error |
| 1 | Vague reference |
| 1 | Verb form |
| 4 | Verb tense |
| 5 | Poor word choice |
| 2 | Word form |
| 5 | Awkward sounding but understandable phrases/sentences. Non-idiomatic. |
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| 1 | The text seems choppy here, as if it jumps from one idea to another without making a smooth connection or understanding why. |