ESL 21B(1761)

Essay 1.2

07/06/07

"Cultural Patern"

    Each country has its own cultural values. According to the American Values and Assumptions article, "A cultur can be viewd as a collection of values and assumptions that go to gether to shape the way a group of people preceives and related to the world around them."People classify in various groups because of their ideas. Those whoes cultural background are the same, have precislyWChoice alikeWChoice belifs , and they are mostly agree to eachAwkward others ideas in different subjects. People should be aware of differences in the others point of view to improve the quality of their relationships with people of various nationalities. When a foriegner visit visitCut or live in a certain country, they should respect to the cultural values of that particular country even though these values might not be reasonable to them. I think that people should keep the helpful positive values and get rid of harmful negative ones.Choppy There are lots of intresting cultural values in Iran that foriegners should be aware of them to avoid conflict with people, such as, clothing, Iranian personal space, formalities and mourning days.

    Clothing in Islamic countries like Iran , which calledVForm Hejab{1}, is different from other countries around the world. There are lots of rules baseVForm on Islam that people hava to obey while they are in Iran. Showing any part of body that makeS/VAgreement people sensual is against Islamic laws. So, MenCapitalization and women in Iran hasS/VAgreement to wear special clothWChoice to cover their body from ecahother. Women should wear scarf and uniformWChoice, and men should wear long sleaves T_shirts and long trousers. Muslims belive that Hejab keeps people away from sin. Their ideas of this kind of covering is to respect to others personalities. Infact, they don't lead external beauties have control on their realitionships. A person, who appear in society without Hejab in Iran, is a criminal in Iranian eyes, and he or she has to spend some time in a jail to be abstemiousWChoice. Therfore, forigners have to be aware of clothing rules in Iran to be away fromAwkward prison.

    Also one of the most important values in Iran is the personal space between genders. Different sexe cant have phisical relationships in theArt public like kissing, hand shaking and touching just becauseAwkward of Islamic belifes. However, "Arabs do a Hollywood_style, cheek_to_cheek social kiss, and their conversation in similary up close and personal."(Lisa Davis){2}. {***}ChoppyPhisical contact between unmarried men and women in Iran may have dramatic consequences, such as capital punishment. For example, if a non_muslim woman has phisical contavct with a muslim man, she has to convert to muslim and married him inorder to be aliveAwkward. Also, if a married man attend toAwkward sexual contact with another woman exept his wife, theirReference not clear punishment is stoned to death. The shower of stoneSing/Plu thrown these people's head until they die. In Iranian cermonies men's sectionWChoice are sepreted with women's section by peace of thick curtaine. Men and women can dance in their own section far from each other. Also, boys and girls school in Iran are seprate. Therfore, they cant get to know each other. Eventhough there might be any men around, women cant take of their scarf. Because police have permition to arrest people withWChoice different sexes who have phisical contact with eachother in the public, foreigner should be aware of Iranian personal space to prevent from any conflict.

    Another important tradition in Iran is complimentWChoice. {***}ChoppyPaying attention to formalities rather than enjoying ofCut life is one of the unconstructive??? Iranian ideas. IranianSing/Plu believe that compliment is one of the best ways to show their respect to others. For instance, when a person comes to a party, every one stand up till he sit downs. To be a good host, you should treat your guests better than you family. People cant act as they want because of complimentWChoice. In addition, people persistant to their own wishes till change others mind. For example, Iranian don't eat food before they offer their food to others. I feel like a criminal when my friends don't eat some peases of my food. With this kind of behaviour I force others to eat with me eventhough they don't like my food. If some one dosent care to this value, he or she countWChoice as an impolite person in the community. Thefore, foreigners should be aware of this special iranian custome to stop others missunderstanding about them.

    One of the Iranian belifs that introduce themAwkward is their own special way to formAwkward mourning days. There are two types of mourning cermonies. First is the public murning cermony which called Ashora Tasoa. In this lamentation muslim attend to beat their brest in the public. A group of people cry and scream in the street for amount. People biting themselve with iron materials , and it may causes bleading from some parts of their body specialy their head. Many tourist from all around the world visit Iran to see this cermony. Iranian perform this cermony to remind themselves one of thir Imams who had died many years ago. This cermony can have negative effect on people's soalExplain. Also, Iranian who lostVTense one of their close relatives should wear black cloths untillWChoice one mounth. If a forigner enter to a mourning cermony, they better to knowAwkward this important custom amoung Iranian people. If some one dosnt observe this custom, people might look daggers at himAwkward.

In conclusion, people whoes cultural values are not the same, might have basic trouble to institute relationships with eachother. People should become familiar to other countries values. Relationships between people of different nationalities are not very strong.Explain In addition, it could be destroyed at the short amount of timeAwkward because of missunderstanding and conflicting between these people ideasAwkward. These differences comes from things like values, beliefs and religions. For forighner might be hard to vist other countries with out being familiar with thair values. However, as long as there is a respect it shouldn't be any problems in people contacts. For example, Levine ,who is a social psychologist, is the aouther of Time talks with an Accent article. He has lived in different countries. During his journy he realize the differences between his cultural values and those countries. Eventhough the reason of some values arent clear to him, he respect to that particular value to have strongt relationships with people of other nationalities.

 

Grade 82

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AbbreviationDescription
S/VAgreementSubject/verb agreement error
ArtArticle error
CapitalizationCapitalization error
CutCut -- this text is not necessary
Sing/PluSingular/plural error
VFormVerb form
VTenseVerb tense
WChoicePoor word choice
???Incomprehensible text
AwkwardAwkward sounding but understandable phrases/sentences. Non-idiomatic.
Reference not clear
ChoppyThe text seems choppy here, as if it jumps from one idea to another without making a smooth connection or understanding why.
ExplainFurther explain or expand on this idea. The way it's presented in your text is not sufficient for the reader.

 

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